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Workplace change memo Comment [BG1]: Formatting. Be
sure to tab in the entries on each line s
Date: October 1, 2020 that they are all aligned on their left
To: Bruce Grossman margins. See the sample memo on
From: Hau-Tse Yang, Human Resource & Development [Title] page 121 for formatting guidelines.
Subject: Suggestions to Improve Working Conditions Workplace change
Comment [BG2]: Try to make the
The office change plan that should have been be implemented last month has not yet subject line a bit more
been implemented. For that reason, Tthis project will be implemented on October 5 attention-grabbing for the reader.
instead. th. When that occurs, Pplease be sure to observe the following guidelines:
points: Comment [BG3]: It is not clear wha
 Please pack your personal belongings before leaving the office. first. this is. What are the specific changes
 Deliver important documents to the secretary for quick check for omissions. What is the plan? In addition, this wa
 When the office is being renovated, please do not enter and exit unnecessarily not really the assignment. This reads
more like directions and protocols for
arbitrarily to avoid unnecessary interference with workers. what to do when certain changes are
implemented, although it is unclear wh
If you have any questions, please telephone or , e-mail me by October 4. I will the changes are. In any event, the
answer for you. assignment was for you to make
Enclosure suggestions to your boss about change
that you believe would be helpful to th
employer or improve working condition
and to explain and detail why you think
those changes are needed.

Comment [BG4]: Tone. It is for th
boss to provide these kinds of protocol
This reads more like a directive from a
boss than suggestions from an employe

Comment [BG5]: Unclear. What
kind of omissions? More detail needed
Is your suggestion that the office be
renovated? Why? In what ways?
What are the various options? What
are the potential costs? What are the
pros and cons?

Comment [BG6]: This reads a bit to
much like a directive as well.

Comment [BG7]: What does this
refer to?