PART TWO ~ GUIDED WRITING 35 DEVELOPING THE IDEAS Example 1 : One day – Ibrahim and his friends – fishing – river Step 1 : Writing the main idea One day, Ibrahim and his friends went fishing at a river. Step 2 : Elaborating the main idea by adding in details and examples. One fine day, during the last school holidays, Ibrahim and two of his friends, Rahman and Aziz, decided to go fishing at a river which was not too far from their houses. Step 3 : Writing the conclusion for the paragraph When they reached there they started to fish. Sample Paragraph : 3. 4. Example 2 Based on the picture write as many sentences as possible by elaborating the notes given. Main Idea I was cycling home after school. write a simple sentence as the main idea. Supporting detail 1 It was a hot afternoon. description of time / situation Supporting detail 2 I was feeling very tired. description of feeling Supporting detail 3 I cycled slowly. use adverb Supporting detail 4 I saw a van. write another sentence. Supporting detail 5 The van was parked by the roadside. where was it seen? One fine day, during the last school holidays, Ibrahim and two of his friends, Rahman and Aziz, decided to go fishing at a river which was not too far from their houses. When they reached there they started to fish. after school – cycling – home – saw – van
PART TWO ~ GUIDED WRITING 36 INFORMAL LETTER You and your friends went on a three-day trip to Berangan Island, a famous tourist island. Write a letter to your cousin to describe about the trip. When writing your letter: Writing the sentences in a paragraph. I was cycling home after school. It was a hot afternoon. I was feeling very tired. I cycled slowly. I saw a van. The van was parked by the roadside. Barbecue Spot
PART TWO ~ GUIDED WRITING 37 you may use all the notes given elaborate on the given notes to make it more interesting make sure it is not less than 120 words. 1. Writing the Introduction Paragraph LEVEL 1 a. Change the rubric into the opening paragraph. Rubric : You and your friends went on a three-day trip to Berangan Island, a famous tourist island. Write a letter to your cousin to describe about the trip. Change to : My friends and I went on a three-day trip to Berangan Island, a famous tourist island. I am writing this letter to describe about the trip. b. Writing the introduction paragraph: ---------------------------------------------- ---------------------------------------------- ---------------------------------------------- ---------------------------------------------- Dear ................................, Hello there! How are you? I am fine and I hope that you are fine too. You know that ............................................................................................. ..................................................................................................................... ..................................................................................................................... ..................................................................................................................... ..................................................................................................................... ..................................................................................................................... ..................................................................................................................... Your address Your friend's name Continue with the opening paragraph.
PART TWO ~ GUIDED WRITING 38 LEVEL 2 Complete the paragraph below to form an introduction for your letter. ---------------------------------------------- ---------------------------------------------- ---------------------------------------------- ---------------------------------------------- Dear ................................, Hello there! .................................................................................................................... ................................................................................................................................................. I am writing this letter ............................................................................................................. ................................................................................................................................................. ................................................................................................................................................. ................................................................................................................................................. LEVEL 3 Write your own introduction paragraph for your letter. ---------------------------------------------- ---------------------------------------------- ---------------------------------------------- ---------------------------------------------- Dear ................................, ..................................................................................................................................... ................................................................................................................................................. ................................................................................................................................................. ................................................................................................................................................. ................................................................................................................................................. .................................................................................................................................................
PART TWO ~ GUIDED WRITING 39 2. Writing the Content Paragraph(s) LEVEL 1 Write the main ideas for the activities carried out during the trip with the help of the words given in the map. Note: To write the main idea, you must always check on the correct use of Subject and Predicate. Example: arrived , Hotel van, Barbecue Spot, Sunshine Hotel SUBJECT PREDICATE We arrived at Berangan Island at 1.00 pm. We took the Hotel van. We checked in at Sunshine Hotel We went to Barbecue Spot for dinner. Writing Topic Sentences / Main Ideas Day 1 1. We arrived at Berangan Island at 1.00 pm. 2. _____________________________________________________________________ 3. _____________________________________________________________________ 4. _____________________________________________________________________ Day 2 5. _____________________________________________________________________ 6. _____________________________________________________________________ 7. _____________________________________________________________________ 8. _____________________________________________________________________ 9. _____________________________________________________________________
PART TWO ~ GUIDED WRITING 40 Day 3 10. _____________________________________________________________________ 11. _____________________________________________________________________ 12. _____________________________________________________________________ 13. _____________________________________________________________________ 14. _____________________________________________________________________ LEVEL 2 1. Develop the main ideas by adding more details and elaborations. Come out with as many details as possible. Example: Main Idea 1: We arrived at Berangan Island at 1.00 pm. Writing Prompts Elaboration/Details How to go? We took a ferry to the island. How long? The ferry ride took about two hours to reach the island. What time departed? We started the journey at 11.00 am from school. How to ride the ferry? First, we gathered at the school hall and then we went to the jetty by bus. 2. Write a paragraph of the main idea and details using variety of sentence structures. Rearrange the sentences accordingly. Firstly, we gathered at the school hall and then went to the jetty by bus. We started the journey at 11.00 am from school. We took a ferry to the island and it took about two hours to reach the island. We arrived at Berangan Island at 1.00 pm.
PART TWO ~ GUIDED WRITING 41 Now, you try : 1. Develop the main ideas by adding more details and elaborations. Come out with as many details as possible. Main Idea 2: _______________________________________________________________ Writing Prompts Elaboration/Details 2. Write a paragraph of the main idea and details using variety of sentence structures. Rearrange the sentences accordingly. LEVEL 3 1. Make your paragraph more interesting by varying the sentence structures. You can also add other details to elaborate your paragraph. (adjectives, adverbs, idiomatic expressions and phrasal verbs) Example : Simple paragraph. Firstly, we gathered at the school hall and then went to the jetty by bus. We started the journey at 11.00 am from school. We took a ferry to the island and it took about two hours to reach the island. We arrived at Berangan Island at 1.00 pm.
PART TWO ~ GUIDED WRITING 42 Well-developed and well-organised paragraphs. Now, you try : Main Idea : ________________________________________________________________ The eight-hour journey on an old school bus was very torturing. However, the picturesque view of Berangan Island, as seen on television, was above all. The bus took me and my friends to Kuala Ping Jetty as we had to board a ferry to go to the island. Once we arrived at the jetty, there were already crowds of people, mostly foreign tourists, queuing at the ticket counter. It was very noisy and chaotic but we were very lucky as our teacher had already booked the tickets. We embarked the Eagle Star and seated on the upper deck. It gave us a spectacular view of the crystal clear sea and the small islands surrounding. My best friend Mahmud was very quiet and his face looked very pale. He was sea sick! Fortunately he did not throw up on me. It was almost two hours ride and finally we set our foot on the island safely. There was a bus already waiting for our arrival to take us to Sunshine Hotel.
PART TWO ~ GUIDED WRITING 43 NARRATIVE ESSAY (STORY) One day, an old woman’s house was on fire. You are one of her neighbours who helped to put out the fire. Using the pictures and the notes below, write a story of what happened. When writing your story, you must use all the given notes/information elaborate on the given notes/information write in not less than 120 words
PART TWO ~ GUIDED WRITING 44 Developing the Ideas LEVEL 1 1. Construct a few simple sentences from the notes given to form the main ideas. Example : It was a long day. 1. 2. 3. 4. 2. Add a few details for each sentence. (adjectives or adverbs) Example : It was a long quiet day. 1. 2. 3. 4. 3. Rewrite the sentences in a paragraph.
PART TWO ~ GUIDED WRITING 45 LEVEL 2 1. Construct a few simple sentences from the notes given to form the main ideas. Example : The fire spread all over the house. 1. 2. 3. 4. 2. Vary the structures and add a few details for each sentence. Example : The blazing fire quickly spread all over the house. 1. 2. 3. 4. 3. Rewrite the sentences in a paragraph.
PART TWO ~ GUIDED WRITING 46 LEVEL 3 1. Construct the main ideas for the picture above. 1. 2. 3. 4. 2. Vary the structures and add a few details for each sentence to make it more interesting 1. 2. 3. 4. 3. Rewrite the sentences in a paragraph.